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Hows this sound? My myth of steve jobs.?

• For my English class I had to create a short myth about a famous person that would be heard 400 years into the future. So here it is. Oh also please tell me if I made any mistakes or if there is anything I can improve on! The Myth of Steve Jobs Ever since birth it was a well-known fact that Steve Jobs had an advanced mind that would one day be far superior to others. It was as if he had a window to the future that only he could view. Evidence of this became more obvious when he had created his own personal computer. From that point on he revolutionized the way we use electronic devices. Some people believed God himself helped Steve Jobs to create some of the most advanced technology. Others say Steve Jobs was a God, the God of technology. No matter what he was he had a gift that he would give to the world. For many years he continued to produce and release many advanced pieces of technology with out a single problem. Not everybody had like Steve Jobs. One person in fact hated Steve. His name was Bill gates and for many years he tried to ruin Steve Jobs by creating technology better than his. However everything Bill Gates made was just a replica of Steve Jobs. Many argue that Bill gates hadn’t hated Jobs but simply envied or admired him. Either way they had created a war between technologies, a war that would last forever. Unlike most wars fought throughout history this was a war without death. A war without pure hate, in fact it was simply a war of sides. Steve Jobs hadn’t cared if he was better than Bill Gates or if what he released would be more popular. He only wanted to advance technology so one-day people could do things they never believed to be possible. Steve Jobs was a troubled man. He had suffered from cancer, cancer that would one day return. He knew his time was limited and he began to release things more often. Hoping he would be able to see the beginning of an advanced future. Even though he was releasing things more often they still were far more advanced than their previous version. He began this with something that would not only change technology but also revolutionize music. This device was called the iPod. Something that many others envied and later copied. It was the device that made him truly superior. Steve Jobs knowing that he was not immortal stepped down from the creator of advanced technology and peacefully waited for death. He assigned a new man to take control for him. He had died shortly after that but he died a happy man knowing he changed technology. Knowing that he changed the future.

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