Is World Charity Organisation a real Organisation?

I am organizing a charity dinner party and i am writing an aim for the event. so please can you check it ?

• Our main aim of this event is to try our best to raise as much money for donation to charity as possible. We are hoping to achieve this by bringing in more people from wider society and community into the event, by spreading the knowledge of charity to wider range of people in the society and getting more people to get involved with the charity. By raising money from this event we can help those poor people who are suffering and can help them by providing them with lots of facilities and actives such as food, clothes, technologies e.t.c., So that they have the opportunity to live their life normally as human being and therefore ending their suffering. Alongside this we wish to spread existence of our organisation throughout the world.

• Answer:

  Personally, I think it's too bland. There needs to be more specific wording about what makes you special, different and more worthy than any other organization that helps others. As a funder, I would want to know that I am contributing to something that is helping someone like me. The current wording lacks emotional empathy. Professionally speaking, I encourage you to find statements of other organizations doing similar work that you like and tweak them to express your vision, mission and methodology.