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• please, I need help with this essay, so far I have written the first draft which is the one below however; English writing essay is not my strongest subject. so if you will be kind to give me more idea or add more add or correct the grammar, punctuation and word or sentence order. and tell me how it look or sound so far. I appreciate so much. thank you and please no downer answer, I had hard time writing this essay and I'm a second language student so I'm just learning this essay writing stuffs. don't break my feelings. thanks. Whole process essay first draft “My College Experience as a Freshman” Three of the hardest things I had to face when I first arrived at San Diego City College were take a serious responsibility on my academic, finding parking space was hard and family put so much pressure on me. One of the very first thing I encounter when I first arrive at San Diego City College was that I want to know more about my Academic Success and transfer to SDSU. I didn’t want to do what other friends of mine whom spend years in SDCC not knowing what they want to do or what to accomplish in city college. In the beginning I was like them. I didn’t have a clue of what major I want to be or what classes should I take because I have no college experience nor do I know anything about city college. So I wander around not knowing what I want to achieve or accomplish. It took me a while but than I took a chance of going to the counseling office and talk to one of the counselor. My counselor made me take some easy and hard requirement class that are accepted in University level. She also advice me that, if I was having a hard time in classes that I should always seek for a help by either ask my professor or go to the tutoring department and get help with the homework or assignment. So I made a decision to go to tutoring and get help with the homework. They were wonderful, they help me a lot and help me understand the topic that was discussed in the class. They told me that to always be prepare and better to read the assignment before coming to the class to be able to participate in class discussions and class argument. I also used to put off my school work with parties and going out with my friends. Wisely I manage to save time for my study and not procrastinate because I was a full time student and also work a full time job. So I tried to spend more time on homework, less time on work and other distractions. Another thing that I was aware of that my professor will drop me after 3 or 4 days of not attending class. So I paid close attention to that because I didn‘t want to be drop from class for making up absent or tardiness excuse. That is not acceptable in college. Being as a freshman in college taught me a lot that I have to take responsibility and matters on my own hands and not depends on others. This was one of the first hardest thing I had to face during my freshman year in city college. The second thing I had encounter that was hard for me as a college freshman was finding parking space. When I first visited city college at the time when I was registering and taking my placement test. I was happy and overwhelm because city college has a lot of parking lot and parking space but I soon to learned that these parking space aren’t enough for all the students. I mean, on my first day I had a hard time finding parking space. It took me almost one hour to find a park. I had to park all the way up on balboa parking lot and walk 5 to 10 minute to class. I came in late in my first and second class meeting and my professor almost drop. I felt rude and embarrassed walking in late and distracting the class. So I made a big adjustment and sacrifice to I wake up early, take my siblings to school and get to my class on time. The other thing I didn’t know about City College parking was that city college students must have a parking permit. So I got a $40 citation ticket for violation of not having a parking permit. I tried to talk my way out of it at the City College Police Department but they didn’t care about my excuse so they made me pay the fine. City College has a lot of parking space but they are limited to both the staffs and students. This was also one of the hardest thing I had to face as a college freshman. Finally, although my parents encourage me and supports me to go to college, living with them was a nightmare. They have pressure me to the limit and made me wish if they weren’t my parents. They kept on asking when I’m going to finish with college and how long will it take?. I mean, I just started college, please give me a break. They also gave me so much responsibilities that I hardly had time to study. I have to wake up early to get my self and my youngest siblings ready for school. Than I have to drop them off and pick them from their school. I also have to help them with their homework before I go to my work. I also cook, clean and, did their laundry. Too much responsibility I hardly had t

• Answer:

  You've done well and you describe your difficulties clearly. Your introductory paragraph needs a little sorting: Three of the hardest things I had to face when I first arrived at San Diego City College were, FIRSTLY TO take serious responsibility FOR my academic PROGRESS, SECONDLY, finding A parking space and LASTLY THE PRESSURE MY family put ON me. The rest of it flows well enough. I think I would try to add what you found interesting in the courses to balance the difficulties. All the best in your course and life.