Name of instrumental band where 3 girls playing flute, violin and drum?

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• Band Profile Band Name: Mistaken Destiny Genre of Music: Soft Rock Band Members: Karamajit, John Smith and Sara Role of each member: Karamajit (Drum) and Sara (Sing and Guitar) First Hit Single: Big Girls Don’t Cry Name of first album: Row as Folk List other albums: Look at me, Think for your self, English Man and My Band 2.5 Awards won: Best Mix CD, Best Soft Rock Act and Best Alum First tour: Cairns, Gold Coast, Melbourne, Perth and Canberra Up Coming Tours/Music: New Album and Tours around the word How did the band get together? It all started in 2006 when Sara was singing in a club called the ‘Innisfail Singing Group’. Karamajit went out to the club for some lunch, and hear Sara singing and playing the guitar on stage. She relay like Sara’s voice. At the time Karamajit played the drums in another club in Innisfail called the ‘Business Centre Club’. She had been playing there for 10 years but it was getting a bit boring Karamajit asked Sara if she would like to be in a band with her, where Sara could sing and play the Guitar, and where Karamajit could play the Drums, so they stated a new band. Sara came up with a name for the band; Karamajit liked the name so they decided to call the band ‘Mistaken Destiny’. Then in no time Sara and Karamajit thought of singing there first song, ‘Big Girls Don’t Cry’ and releasing there first album ‘Row as Folk’ in USA. Sara and Karamajit left Innisfail in 2008 to start their new band. Their first hit album was ‘Row as Folk’ and the first hit single was ‘Big girls don’t Cry’. Sara and Karamajit had a lot of fun performing in a live shows, they where amazed with all the people that came and seen the performances. Sara and Karamajit want to make there next tour to Australia, where there will be singing the song ‘Don’t Stop the Music’ from the album Row as Folk. Sara and Karamajit are planning a world tour in 2009 starting off in England and then making it all the way back to there home town, Innisfail. There will be touring to places in Australia, Cairns, Gold Coast, Melbourne, Perth and Canberra. Los Angeles USA Press Releases Official 1st Announcement- Band Day Out 2008 The band ‘Mistaken Destiny’ is touring with ‘My Chemical Romance’ to support them on their upcoming tour in their home town Los Angeles. They will then be going to Australia, touring Cairns, Gold Coast, Melbourne, Perth and Canberra. They will be in Los Angeles in September and will head to Australia in October. The band will be playing soft rock music, some of the songs that the band will be playing on stage is, ‘Shut Up And Drive’ and they will be also playing the song, ‘The End’. The band will be also playing two other songs from their hit album, ‘Row As Folk’. Their also getting ‘My chemical Romance’ to tour with them, ‘My Chemical Romance’ wants to tour with them because they likes the band ‘Mistaken Destiny’, they think they are a good band and they think the band will archive a lot in their upcoming tours, albums and like shows. For further information about ‘Mistaken Destiny’ upcoming tour band lovers can contact: Mobile number: 0437477374 Web Site: www.Destinyband.com.au Email: [email protected] Music Review Mistaken Destiny played at Cairns Convention Centre on the 8th of October 2008. They sold out in a two days. It was a really awesome performance every one really loved it. They played their best songs and every one had a great time. It was one of the best performances that they have done in years and all the people that was there love it. The performance was flumed so that they get to be on TV and every one said that it was so good that they would like to see more. Mistaken Destiny opened the show with their smash hit song ‘Big girls don’t cry’. Sara their guitarist thinks that this is the best song that they have ever played. They also played a song from there new album ‘Row as folk’ ‘Don’t stop the music’ and Karamajit their drummer said it was the best song that they have song ever. They played some more songs that people love and it made every one have a good time at the performance. Every one that was at the performance said that it was so good that they will love to go to the next performance that they have there. The people find that the performance makes them feel happy and like they was having fun. The performance was that good that it make then jumping up and down. The performance was that best show that they have ever done. The people at the show said that is was so good that they well like to see more. From personal experience, it was one of their best concerts in years. The crowd was ecstatic, loudly cheering from an encore after the amazing performance. Mistaken Destiny brought down the house. Written By Sara Ridgwell

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  This is a monumental task for anyone to, properly, edit and, to be sure your teacher doesn't have a sore hand from red-inking, you need to, carefully, re-read to correct spelling and grammatical errors (a dictionary should be always near you) and insert the proper punctuation marks. The second sentence doesn't require the words: out and some as one assumes she had to go out to get to the club and lunch, always, means some (or there isn't any lunch...). Read this aloud to determine whether, or not, it flows freely and after you've done this, have a friend read it to you. You need to use some more connective clauses, or words -this should not be a collection of, related by subject, sentences. Try to avoid repetition - the word performance is used six times(!) in the final two paragraphs; it's grammatically incorrect to end a sentence with "ever" as this it must be used in conjunction with the words which follow as in: ever was, ever happened or, ever will be. As mentioned previously - read it aloud, until it sounds right, and keep in mind the "flow" as this should sound conversational in rhythm. Note the bridge, or connecting, word and the commas - read aloud and you'll hear that it flows more easily. ...."Big Girls Don't Cry" which Sara, their guitarist, said ....