Homework help: What is the Autumnal Equinox?

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• Hello everyone, I am in the 6th grade. My school had offered me a 500 dallor scholorship. (i really need this) So could you rate my paragraph from1 being the worst and 4 being the best. Only two people from each grade win. Also give me some ways to make my paragraph better. The promt is: How can you help your community. Here is my paragraph; Helping elderly, feeding homeless, volunteering, and cleaning parks are all community service and ways to help your community. But how can I help mine? Helping my community is very important to me, therefore I have decided to come up with some ideas that will allow me to help my community in every season.. As we all know the winter can be a very harsh season, and snow is everywhere. By shoveling the sidewalk I can be sure that my neighborhood citizens will be safe when walking. When the cold season is over, spring follows, and many things start to grow such as grass, plants, and food. With people working and caring for there family, there is no time for them to cut the grass, trim the bushes, or even plant a flower. With a little time I can help these family’s by cutting there grass and help keep there yards in good condition at no cost. During the summer, kids are playing outside and enjoying their break from school. However, their parents may not have the money for someone to baby-sit them over break. With a little help my friends and I can open a free baby sitting service and help the families in need. As you can see I can help my community in many different ways. By doing this I can also help many people and make new friends. Although it sounds like hard work, it will always help someone a good way.

• Answer:

  well, you can start of saying, I can help my community by helping the elderly, feeding the homeless, volunteering, and cleaning parks. On each paragraph you need to edit 3 spaces like: -----) Helping my community is very important to me, therefore I have decided to come up with some ideas that will allow me to help my community in every season.. As we all know the winter can be a very harsh season, and snow is everywhere. By shoveling the sidewalk I can be sure that my neighborhood citizens will be safe when walking.