Research paper on animal cruelty?

WHAT do YOU think of my first research paper draft?

• 1st draft research paper Animal Cruelty Ask the experimenters why they experiment on animals, and the answer is: "Because the animals are like us." Ask the experimenters why it is morally okay to experiment on animals, and the answer is: "Because the animals are not like us." Animal experimentation rests on a logical contradiction. ~Charles R. Magel Animal abuse is an indicator of psychological problems of the abuser and can be helpful in identifying mental issues. The act of animal cruelty can stem from underlying problems in the abuser's life and possibly a mental illness. Many people don’t really see animal cruelty as a crime but it is Animal cruelty is the act of violence or neglect against the animal example are if the owner doesn’t give the animal food or water , fail to give basic veterinary care and shelter . Many studies has shown that children who are around an environment in which there

• Answer:

  you have several grammatical errors and some contradictions with your subject and verb. ex: children is (incorrect) should be children are. also, the 1st 2 sentences in the 2nd paragraph are saying the exact same thing. you need to get rid of one of them. so...go reread and check your grammer and you should be good. overall, good context :)