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• I wrote my resume without the help of anyone. I am applying for entry level customer service positions, or any job that is willing to hire me. I wrote it based on online resume tutorials. Did I do it correctly. How does my objective sound? Also, am i missing anything. Feel Free to rewrite it for me. I really need a JOB.Please help [Briana M. Rockefeller] Summary: A responsible and dependable college student with above average communication skills, ability to work well in a team environment or independently, and eager to take on new challenges. Strengths & Qualifications •Highly dependable and very responsible in accomplishing assigned tasks or projects; • Above average communication and organizational skills; • Good in working solo or as part of a team; • Excellent multitasking skills; • Receptive to personal growth and in gaining new skills. • Proficient Computer Skills including Mac and Windows Operating Systems Work Experience Best Photo Network –Photographer [August 2011- Present] • Adjusting apertures, shutter speeds, and camera focus; • Independently Determining desired images and picture composition ; • Working at different sites under different circumstances to get desired images; • Maintaining great communication with potential & current clients; • Completing requested work in the desired time frame; Volunteer Experience Agua Fria Food Bank –Community Volunteer [Summer 2011] • Distributed Groceries to Families & Individuals In Need; • Pre-Bagging Groceries; • Filling & Stocking Shelves/Refrigerators ; The Children's Believe In Yourself Foundation- Customer Service Fundraisier [April 2009- August 2011] • Demonstrated excellence in service and hospitality utilizing invaluable interpersonal communication skills. •Provided superior customer service during Fundraisers through use of friendly and helpful approaches. • Gave satisfaction to donators by acknowledging needs and answering questions. • Joined other Volunteers at Community Fundraisers to help benefit the organization. • Sold Safety Awareness Gift Items To Help Continue Give-Aways • Participated in trips to Schools, Daycares, and Homeless Shelters to give away Books,T-Shirts, and Safety CD's to Children • Kept track of sales and donations for the day of Volunteer Work Education  California Virtual Academies (2006-2010) High School Graduate  Antelope Valley College (2010-Present) Liberal Arts Major Additional Information • Willingness to work any shift; Including the Night shift, Weekends, & Holidays.

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