Can anyone suggest how I can improve myself?

Can anyone suggest how to improve my poem? It's supposed to be an irony poem.?

• It was the first snowfall of the year, I feel the snowflake melt in my hands As I begin to dread the cold winter months. I rub my hands to keep them warm And wrapped myself in my own embrace. It slowly warms my freezing body. I let myself slowly remember. My old smiling self, Always sang, laughed and jumped with glee. I always loved this time of the year, It's always filled with celebration, happiness and Christmas cheer. I let myself shed a tear, And silently prayed a Christmas miracle would appear. I used to have everything And ended with nothing. I didn't deserve everything I had, Nor did I deserve to have nothing. I let myself have a quick look, Seeing a girl holding her doll dearly was all it took. She held the doll like it was the most precious thing, But still held the doll for me to take. It left me stunned and made me wonder, "Why would this girl give me her valuable gift." The little girl approached me and gave me the doll "Merry Christmas," she said and began to walk away. This small deed gave me a small piece of hope, With nothing in my hand, I gained this small gift. This small gift made me believe, If I just hold on to a piece of hope and always keep the faith There's nothing to fear And everything to gain. Even if you have everything and not have faith, You will loose everything and be left with nothing. Please help me make it into an irony poem. Was it that bad? I really need help on this please?

• Answer:

  Honestly, it was NOT that bad! I read it all the way through and I liked it. I do suggest though ending your lines at certain points to add drama and emotion. Make the reader feel something. And remember - SHOW your reader, don't just flat-out tell them in each line! ;-) Good luck!