Can you grade my essay?

Can you grade my short essay?

• I wrote a short essay and can you please grade it. i have an exam the day after tomorrow and i really need a feedback to improve my skills. Money, people kill to get it and others work to earn it, it’s one of today’s main issues, people are gathered in thousands of meetings to raise a country’s GDP, stable their value and plan ways to introduce more output to increase their budgets. On the other hand, sports are games played to entrain themselves and people watching. When money and sports meet some might view it as exaggeration to a simple game played, and others might argue that it deserve the huge total of money its being paid. Behind an act there’s a reason, good players are being paid these millions because they are scarce. They are needed to entertain the audience and gain sport clubs revenues to pay their employees, a lot of advertisement companies are relying on these matches, too. However, I do agree that money is ruining sports; it’s ruining the idea of being simple and playing with a spirit. Money suppliers are making sports look like one of their businesses; they are forgetting the aim behind the games and focusing on profit, they don’t give chances to other players to take part, instead they’re being attached to one good player, which I don’t agree with. They should give other players a chance to show their talents and interest people with their abilities. Money with unlimited amounts should be paid to poor, developing countries instead, and keep sports simple and give people needs.

• Answer:

  I think thats a solid A. Very good use of punctuation and spelling overall is good. Well done!