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• this is my thesis about alcohol use and im not sure if i did it correct. please help me to fix it so i could make a better introduction thesis statement for my research paper in english. i am a senor and not so good in english. help pls Alcohol Use The word “moonshine” is generally originated in the U.S.A, meaning whiskey illegally made by moonlight, or can also mean “foolish talk.” Alcohol began in 6000-4000 BCE, the selective cultivation of grape vines for making wine in modern Armenia. The use of alcohol spread out all over the world rapidly and, developed over generations. It is also shocking because, even young adult had been in the case of alcohol addiction, especially in the United States. The influence of alcohol to the society is very successful, especially this generation. The media is one of the sources that helped alcohol grew fast in advertising on TV, and other types of media entertainment. After continuously used of alcohol, many cases of health problems about alcohol abused spread out worldwide. The fact consequences of alcohol use helped many people to stop and think twice before entering the world of alcohol and the addiction due of alcohol abused.

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  The word “moonshine” originated in the U.S.A, meaning whiskey illegally made by moonlight, or can also mean “foolish talk.” However the production of alcohol began in 6000-4000 BCE, by the selective cultivation of grape vines for making wine in modern Armenia. The use of alcohol has spread out to most parts of the world very rapidly and has consequently grown into new types of alcohol over generations. It is also shocking because, even young adults have succumbed to alcohol addiction, with the majority concentrated in the United States. The influence alcohol has on society is very prevalent in today's generation. The media is one of the sources that has helped alcohol advertising on grow so rapidly. After continuously use of alcohol, many cases of health problems that result from alcohol abuse have spread to many places throughout the world. The consequences of alcohol has helped many people to stop and think twice before using alcohol and possibly subjecting themselves to alcohol abuse. Needs A LOT of work. Make sure you proof read. Somethings just didn't make sense.