Describe the basic investigative techniques used to investigate homicide?

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• The is meant to be 2000 words but im 1000 word over, i i have the highest masks but need to reduce the amount of words but keep my high mark. can you see if any adjustments are needed please? I really appreciate you taking your time for this year 11 GCSE Drama The aim of this unit was to investigate the theme of prison and develop the understanding of how one may survive or cope with their living conditions inside prison, their daily routines and to see how people who have been sent to prison may reflect on their actions with their involvement of breaking the law. By studying this unit I was able to see how to convey a different variety of emotions, actions, strategies and learn how to respond with detail and emotion when reflecting to a visual stimulus i.e. the image of the hands inside a prison cell. We explored the theme of prison by using a number of stimuli, the visual images included “Person in cell” and “Road to nowhere” of which were images regarding the topic of prison. We also developed a variety of practical tasks to develop a further understanding of the prison theme. For the first task we were given a visual stimulus “Person in cell” of which we had to describe and reflect upon. The image given shown and an inmate behind bars of whom held his or hers hand on their head, their posture low with an arched back creating ambience within the picture. I came across the idea of why or how this individual may have been put into prison. My thoughts came across the topic of “Why does society put people into prison?” I thought this inmate may have been in a cell due to inaccuracy of his crime, I believe that he has not committed a crime but has been convicted over someone else’s doing. The visual stimulus really creates emotion when describing it, yet the crime of this inmate is unknown. The next part of the task was to create a character profile of someone who has committed a crime and then to later hot seat. The name of my character that I portrayed was Mick, a nineteen year old boy from Preston. Mick ran away from home at the age of seven because of an abusive family background. Mick never attended any kind of education so for a couple of years went to live on the streets of Preston. At the age of seventeen Mick had been squatting in an empty house with various friends of whom have also been growing up on the streets. Mick got involved with prison by playing with matches and creating a fire, which later resulted in the burning down of the property. Mick later got sentenced to 4 years in prison for Arson. When participating in the hot seating exercise I used a variety of drama techniques which helped developed my character into making the hot seating exercise believable. Using an accent was a big component of my hot seating as I wanted to portray my character convincingly and to show the kind of background that I was from; the strategy for this was by putting on a northern accent to show that I was from Preston. Many different questions where asked of Mick asking of his background and why he got put into prison, the most popular question overall in other performances was ‘How old are you’. My posture in this exercise was very much slouched down into the chair which made my character come across as lower class. Overall I think my hot seating was well developed and successful and the exercise helped with creating other tasks on the theme of prison. When evaluating someone else’s performance I was really looking at the great deal of emotion which came with the character profile. Joe Higgins’s stealing scenario really stood out to me as he portrayed a convincing role during his performance. Joe made his character believable and his accent was changed to suit his chosen characters ethnic background. Joe’s tone of voice was strong and projected well which made it clear for the audience understanding of the dialogue and accent. this is only part of it bu would be too long to put on here, im just wondering if there would be anything i can improve to make it sound more of a higher standard.

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  Try turning sections like this: "The aim of this unit was to investigate the theme of prison and develop the understanding of how one may survive or cope with their living conditions inside prison, their daily routines and to see how people who have been sent to prison may reflect on their actions with their involvement of breaking the law. By studying this unit I was able to see how to convey a different variety of emotions, actions, strategies and learn how to respond with detail and emotion when reflecting to a visual stimulus i.e. the image of the hands inside a prison cell. We explored the theme of prison by using a number of stimuli, the visual images included “Person in cell” and “Road to nowhere” of which were images regarding the topic of prison. We also developed a variety of practical tasks to develop a further understanding of the prison theme." (147 words) ...into something like this: "In studying this unit, I learned to respond to a variety of stimuli (such as the visual images "Person in Cell" and "Road to Nowhere") in order to convey a variety of emotions and actions that reflect the understanding I gained of how a person would cope with incarceration. I gained an understanding of their daily lives and routines, and was better able to explore how prisoners reflect on their prior actions and learn to survive their environments." (78 words) This is just a rough edit, but the idea is to make the writing more active, more about what you learned, and less about a review of the assignment. Try to take it out of "question and answer" format, and simply incorporate the questions into your answers. Overall it looks good, it's just a question of shortening the writing (Mick's playing with matches led to a fire that burnt down ~what property?~, for which he served a four year sentence for arson. I was able to use a variety of techniques to develop my character during the hot-seat exercise.) Use the active "I went" and not the passive "I was going." Also, check out that second paragraph. It needs reworked for grammar and spelling.