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What is the meaning of the song im so sick by flyleaf?

Please please read my short song id appreciate it?

  • thank you for reading it and taking your time too and please leave your hat full and kid coments but before you read please read it carefully and close some one thought it did not rhyem and well you just gotta open your eyes and REEEEEAAAAADDDDDD it and it it dosent have meaning to you or you dont see it making any scince well just think about the song and all what it could be and if you still dont get it tell me and ill let you know exactly what it means and thanky you again when i woke up this morning to day.i wasent feeling all to great.my stomach was a turnin and my heart was really hurtin.i thought to my self what in the world could it be.then i rememberd my baby left lastnight for missisiipii.now im completley alone.keep trying to call her on my phone and i dint get a single awnser.now all i got to do is think how much i really miss her. im feelin real sick.with out her i cant get any kicks.im like melted ice cream before you could take a lick and as ruined as a craked bulding brick. she hasent even been gone for a day but its still driving me super insane.im as lonley as i can completley be.its hard living with out her colse to me.with out her im as worthless as a gassless cadiliac.i cant wait for to to come on back.im dyling like a dog with no watter.evry second with out her is just getting to much harder.she wont be back untill the end of june.now im just counting the time beetween the sun and moon. im feelin real sick.with out her i cant get any kicks.im like melted ice cream before you could take a lick and as ruined as a craked bulding brick.

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    There's a good amount of feeling in there, and rhythm and such. I think that last paragraph could use a bit of work. I don't suppose you could play this for us? It would be easier to assess things that way.

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There's a good amount of feeling in there, and rhythm and such. I think that last paragraph could use a bit of work. I don't suppose you could play this for us? It would be easier to assess things that way.

crazyem vultus de felis mulier mea bellus

it's okay, i've been songwriting since i was four and believe me you do get better with practice. It depends what genre your writing, if writing a pop song it is very important that it is relatable. what you really need to decide is this song going to be a catchy sad song or a meaningful one where you let your heart pour out in it. The only thing that i just didn't really like about it was it was to common subject and rhymed a lot with no dead deep meaning, well maybe there is but you might need to lighten it a little it too make it more meaningful. Keep songwriting you'll get better through practice:)

Somebody You Used To Know

Well done!!

hm it's good....keep on writing!!<3

I like it

Shelly

i like it. because that's how i have felt before. i really connected with it and i liked how it wasn't gross or with too much cursing. i liked the mississippi part because its random. i would Love to hear the end result :) good job

well you could improve on your spelling. :) jk but yeah it's great. maybe add something like I'm like a book with no words now try to read me if you like but nothing is there anymore just plain sterile white A moral with no meaning at all what is supposed to be my lesson why did she have to let me fall :)

Terrible. Like worse than any song I've ever heard. Sounds like a 7 year old wrote it. Looks like something a 10 year old girl would post on myspace.

therapynic

I'm no expert in songs or in communication, but it seems OK. At least good enough to keep writing. I object to, in order written: super (just don't need that word) cracked building brick (c'mon, you can do better; unless you want to imply you'll be fine, it could at least be BROKEN brick) gasless cadillac (I don't know, it just doesn't grab me) 'counting the time between the sun and moon' (to frilly for my taste)

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