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• How can I improve this web page? Your job is to review a single web page: www.mercado-ventas.com/English-Spanish-Translation.htm This page offers a translation service. I, -the writer of the page-, am not an English native speaker, so you would have to detect and correct any mistakes I might have done, -including mistakes about English style or unclear expression. You would also have to tell me your first impression, and if I have to improve some things, or what I might have missed about the service, which might be essential. All criticism is highly welcomed, just imagine you are one of our potential customers. Would or wouldn't you buy, and why? And what is particularly difficult to do or to grasp in that web page, or where would you need more information. Many thanks! P.s. I'm not one of the translators, nor did any translator help me, -I'm the designer-. (My English is as good as you can see here.) Additional Note: In case anyone is interested, we're also hiring a customer service "manager". He has to answer customer's e-mails, (a few each day), and help me proof-read any future content, and will get 8.88% of all sales. (Go into the web page, if interested.)

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  Hello wz, I only included the text here that I thought needed changing. Lets start with the "Benefits of our translations:" I would change this to "Benefits of our Translation Service:" Two translators for every project! Independent proof-reading after every translation is finished! Native experts - graduate students, university teachers and linguists! Lowest price spectrum in the market! Highest confidentiality! 100% satisfaction guaranteed! Easy payment options! Support staff always available! Hiring us is as simple as sending your project by e-mail! Change this paragraph: OLD: We specialize only in English to Spanish translations and we employ a unique methodology which guarantees the quality of the job while maintaining our prices extremely low. You can choose among two different offers depending on your needs. NEW: We specialize only in English to Spanish translations. Our service employs a unique methodology which guarantees the quality of the job, while maintaining our extremely low prices. You can choose among two different offers depending on your needs. OLD: It's aimed at general texts, marketing documents and web sites. These translations are performed by Latin-American graduate students with at least 3 years experience in an English speaking country. All translations are later proof-read by a Latin-American professional translator. This way, you can pay much less, and the excellency of the translation is guaranteed. NEW: Our basic service is aimed at general texts, marketing documents and web sites. These translations are performed by Latin-American graduate students with at least 3 years experience in an English speaking country. All translations are later proof-read by a Latin-American professional translator. This way, you pay less and the excellence of our service is guaranteed. OLD:It's aimed at public and private documents which might be difficult to understand for a layman or which manage a style or terminology unusual in everyday life. These translations are done by two professional Latin-American translators with at least 7 years experience each one. All of our 6 translators are also university teachers and linguists, and are officially certified in their respective countries. NEW: Our premium service is aimed at public and private documents which might be more difficult to understand, or which use a style/terminology unusual in everyday life. These translations are done by two professional Latin-American translators with at least 7 years experience. All of our translators are university teachers, linguists, and are also officially certified in their respective countries. OLD: The difference between European Spanish and Latin-American Spanish is probably no greater than between British and American English, so there are no fundamental problems of understanding. Millions of Spaniards watch Latin-American soap operas without any trouble, for example. NEW: The difference between European Spanish and Latin-American Spanish is probably no greater than British and American English, so there are no fundamental problems of understanding. For example, millions of Spaniards watch Latin-American soap operas without any trouble. OLD: You'll receive a link along with each fragment of your translation to place an order by credit card, or using the method of your convenience. You can visit ShareIt.com or their Customer Care Center to know more about the payment process. NEW: You will receive a link from us with each fragment of your translation that will enable you to pay using your credit card. We also accept alternate methods of payment. Please visit ShareIt.com or their Customer Care Center for more information about the payment process. OLD: Translations are sent to you in .doc or .rtf format, which is compatible with most word processing applications, like Microsoft Word. NEW: Translations will be sent to you in .doc or .rtf format. These formats are compatible with most word processing applications including Microsoft Word. OLD: If you have Microsoft Word, just use the Count words command in the Tools menu to know the number of words in your project. Divide that number by 250, and multiply it by the respective rate. NEW: If you have Microsoft Word, click on the 'Count Words' command in the Tools menu and you will be shown the number of words in your file. Once you know the number of words, divide it by 250 and multiply by the respective rate. OLD: For a general approximation, a double spaced text page and most web pages contain 250 words in average. However, please note that we charge you for the exact number of words in your project, so that you never pay more no matter the format. NEW: As a general rule, a double spaced text page and most web pages contain 250 words. Please note however, that we charge you for the exact number of words in your project. This ensures that you pay the same rate no matter what the format of your document is. OLD: Full guaranty NEW: Full Guarantee OLD: There's an unconditional money back guaranty for the last fragment paid and approved. There's also a life time guaranty on the whole project for a free revision and correction if a mistake is ever found. NEW: We offer an unconditional money back guarantee for the last fragment that you have paid for. There Is also a life time guarantee on the whole project for a free revision and correction if a mistake is ever found. OLD: There's a whole range of services available for your web site, ranging from locating the best Spanish keywords for your product or service, or making a supply and demand study, passing through marketing experiments to improve your sales copy, and design and architecture quality assurance, to the most advanced search engine optimization techniques. Just about everything you need to boost your sales in the net. NEW: There is a whole range of services available for your website, ranging from locating the best Spanish keywords for your product/service to the most advanced search engine optimization techniques. We also do supply and demand studies and architecture quality assurance. Just about everything you need to boost your sales on the net! Also note that the headings after this heading: "Why Latin-American Spanish instead of European Spanish?" are no longer capitalized and this should be changed as well: OLD: How to begin your translation project NEW: How to Begin Your Translation Project: OLD: How to calculate the cost of your project NEW: How to Calculate the Cost of Your Project: OLD: Full guaranty NEW: Full Guarantee Let me know if you need any clarifications regarding this answer. tisme-ga