Could you help me to proofread this short essay?(interesting topic to read)?

Here are some things I have found: 1. In January 13th 2001, -> On January 13th 2001, 2. I always have had a phobia to earthquakes but I thought I was going to die on this one. -> I always have had a phobia of earthquakes but I thought I was going to die with this one. 3. The earth started shaking slowly, the intensity increased quickly and was here when the panic attacked to my family and I. ->You are saying that the earth was slowly shaking, but then the it started to quickly go faster? Maybe you should rephrase this, because the two parts are kind of contradicting. Also what was "here"? The intensity? And what panic? The panic of the earthquake? 4. I remember a scare sound coming from the ground while many things was falling to the floor.-> I remember a scary sound coming from the ground while many things were falling to the floor. 5. The trees were shaking violently and throwing all their leads and fruits to the floor. -> You were just talking about the sounds underneath you, so you should probably mention now that you are speaking of outside. So you could write this -> Outside, the trees were shaking violently and throwing all their leaves and fruits to the floor. 6. It was an horrible scene -> It was a horrible 7. The earthquake occurred in middle winter season, so the ground was weak and unstable because of the rainfalls. -> The earthquake occurred in mid-winter , so the ground was weak and unstable due to the great amount of rainfall. (does it rain a lot there? because if it does, then you can add in the "great amount", but if it doesn't, then that would be miss leading). 8. For this reason, a part of the hill came down followed the earthquake ended. -> I'm not sure i understand this very sentence well. Did the hill fall down following the earthquake? 9. This was not caused severe damage but made us remember the big one before. -> It did not cause severe damage, but made us remember the big one before. 10. Remember your period at the end of you last sentence. 11. Does Richter have to be capitalized? I'm not sure. You should check on that. 12. My Country El Salvador is located-> My Country, El Salvador, is located Your paper is very good. Your descriptions and the moral. One more thing though, you could try to use more word choice. So instead of "big", use "huge" or "damaging". Good luck! I'm sure you'll get an A.

With more practice at writing your stories will get better. Read the story outloud, and rewrite, rewrite and rewrite the story and you will catch many of your mistakes.