Could you please grade my SAT practice essay?

4

the example isn't strong enough plus its a little too short if the example were to be a bit stronger, then the shortness wouldnt' count as much strong example usually come from literature, past historic events, or a personal thing that happens to be very memorable making a smoothie, that turned out to ice cream, isn't very strong in the idea. sorry S: out of 6... this would be a 4+

I like that you used a concrete example. It illustrates well that failure could be success, when viewed from a different perspective. It will impress the board if you can take some examples from history, too, such as Edison's failed attempts at a light-bulb filament, Einstein flunking math, or George W. Bush getting mediocre grades all throughout school. On second thought, strike that last example. Your thesis is not strong. I'm not sure what the original question is that the essay addresses. The last paragraph sort of meanders, and I'm not exactly sure what you're trying to say. To be brutally honest, I'd award 5/12, but don't get discouraged. You're still very young, and I'd say you're right on track. You have three years to hone your writing skills.

A 2 out of 6 because it's way too short. It really isn't an essay--just an answer to a short-answer question. The concluding paragraph is weak and you didn't mention your smoothie in your introduction. There are two readers who grade your essay. I would assume they would both give you a 2, so then your final score would be a 4 out of 12.

Out of 12, I'd probably give it a 5 or 6. It probably isn't long enough for a real SAT essay. There are multiple typographical errors. Some sentences don't flow well and it jumps around a lot. I'm not really sure the anecdote fits perfectly along with the already unclear thesis, either.

out of 6 your essay is a 3