How to avoid using I in a cover letter?

Special Snowflake Cover Letter

  • Can you give me some feedback on drafting a cover letter? The special snowflakes flurry within . . . In July, I applied for a senior-ish position with a company. I knew I wasn't quite qualified, but it's a field I'm passionate about and I figured, "Why not?" I got a response at the closing period thanking me for my interest but letting me know another candidate was selected. I always meant to reply with a thank-you for the follow up, because it's always so much better than silence . . . Anyway, there's a new position now within the same office. It's a junior or associate-type position and I know meet or exceed all the employment qualifications. It's in a field of my academic specialty -- I spend much of my free time thinking or reading or wondering about this field of law. The HR office already has my application, writing sample and transcripts. I wrote a cover letter the first time around and I need to write a hell of a letter this time about why I'm worth a second look for this position. How do I address the prior rejection of my application? Should I even address it? Will I look desperate or will I look eager to work for the company? How do I avoid the formal blather while communicating, "I'm perfect for this, I really want it and love what your company does, just hire me already?"

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    I need to write a hell of a letter this time about why I'm worth a second look for this position. To be certain, you always need to write a great cover letter--but you're thinking about your experience with the other job as if it were per se relevant to the new position. It's not, and the fact you were not a great candidate for the earlier position doesn't really bear on whether you'd be a good fit for the new role. I would simply acknowledge that you applied to the earlier position, that you remain excited by the organization, and that you look forward to an opportunity to discuss this new posting. They know they selected someone else for the first job; you don't even need to mention it. Then craft the rest of the letter around why you're such a splendid fit for job #2. Also, you should of course resubmit all your materials to ensure this second application stands on its own. Your last paragraph seems to reference materials you previously submitted. Good luck.

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Did you ever interview for the first position or did you just send your application and then get your rejection? Because if it is the latter there is a really good chance no one remembers you at all (sorry, we go through a lot of resumes). If you never interviewed or anything then you should not address it at all, you should focus completely on this current job and why you are good for it. Act as if you hadn't already applied for another position, send all the information they request again, make it easy on them. You aren't asking them to give you a second look for this position, this is your first time applying for this position, it is basically a blank slate. If you did interview then you should only really address it in passing. I would say something like, "From our previous conversations about the otherposition I could tell that this was a company I really wanted to work for (and then give reasons why)." People apply for multiple positions within the same company all. the. time. no one will think you are desperate if you are applying for two jobs that you are (at least mostly) qualified for and actually want. You only look desperate if you apply for every position they have listed regardless of fit or qualifications.

magnetsphere

http://jobhelp.azlibrary.gov/resources/T%20Bar%20Cover%20Letter%20Sample.pdf that I saw on that post yesterday is really good.

COD

I can't quite tell from your question whether you've resubmitted everything, but I would definitely do so again so they don't have to go digging in their archives (aka some random file cabinet somewhere) to find your old writing sample - it's been three months, they might not have it easily at hand. And the way to spin your previous rejection is just as magnetsphere suggests: our conversations about previousposition reinforced my excitement about Company X and the work you are doing. I would love the opportunity to discuss the details of newposition... etc etc. Good luck to you!

hungrybruno

Just write a cover letter as though you had never applied to the company. That means if you haven't posted to THIS job, do so. While each position we apply for is deeply personal and contains all our hopes and dreams, sadly, it's quite the reverse for the folks weeding through the resumes. Also, see the http://www.metafilter.com/131829/Sell-Yourself. Most cover letters aren't actually read.

Ruthless Bunny

On second read, I agree with magnetsphere--if they never contacted you other than to let you know you were not selected, it is entirely likely you never made it past HR and your prior application was discarded out of hand. If that's the case, don't mention the prior application and just write a regular cover letter.

Admiral Haddock

You don't need to say anything about the prior rejection or assume that it has any bearing on the decision for this position. It's likely they were just looking for a particular qualification that you lacked. They didn't put a black mark next to your name anywhere; as others say it's likely they won't remember your name at all. If they do remember for some reason, what you see as looking desperate to work for a company looks to the company more like being passionate about their company and actually caring about them. It's a good thing. I would suggest using the cover letter to talk 50% about your skills - basically go line by line down the qualifications in the position description and write down why you meet what they ask for in each line, and then additionally mention your academic specialty and any other experience that's hyper-relevant - and 50% about the passion that you discussed here.

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