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National Junior Honor Society Essay...... HELP fast!!!?

• i just finished my essay and i was wondering if it was okay. PLEASE if you see something wrong or something that isn't grammatically correct please tell me Olivia Mastrosimone Grade 7 South Side Middle School National Junior Honor Society Essay The National Junior Honor Society is a very prestigious organization that I would love to be a part of. It is a group of students that exemplifies the traits of service, leadership, character, citizenship, and scholarship. I feel that each student with the privilege to such commitment should devote their time and education to this foundation. I am truly honored to be a candidate for the South Side Middle School Junior Honor Society. The qualities and characteristics that make up the National Junior Honor Society (Service, Leadership, Character, Citizenship, and Scholarship) are not only important for every member of the NJHS to have, but for the school they attend too. These qualities and characteristics are important to South Side Middle School because if the school as a whole demonstrates these qualities, then that school will have students that excel academically, socially and students that will be more inclined to do more for their community. Theses qualities and characteristics are also very important to society because the people who possess these qualities make the world a better place. The reason the world is like this today is because of the people who show these qualities and characteristics in their everyday lives. One person that shows all these qualities is my father. His profession is a Real Estate Lawyer. He shows service by often completing assignments at work with no compensation. He is also a leader because he is one of the head legal partners of his department and is very dependable and he often contributes his ideas to his colleagues. He has much character, too. He is very honest, reliable, respectful, courteous, and maintains a good and clean lifestyle. He was also in many school clubs growing up, such as ( i have to ask him) He has an extremely high regard for democracy and justice. He possesses scholarship because all through his academic career, he had very high grades and he attended St. Johns college. I truly believe that my father shows all these qualities and characteristics in his everyday life. I think that as a potential member of the National Junior Honor Society, I have demonstrated or soon will demonstrate the qualities and characteristics that the NJHS looks for in an inductee. I am a very honest person and many of my friends know that they can definitely rely on me. I do not do any school clubs currently, but I am a member of many organizations. I was on the 2012 school soccer team and I do many other activities that help me demonstrate leadership and citizenship. People have told me that I am a good leader and that I have character. I love to help out with the community by donating clothing, food and other goods to people in need. Also, getting good grades in school i something that is extremely important to me. I have been on high honor role all year and i plan to do the same in eight grade. I am truly honored to be a potential inductee for the National Junior Honor Society. I believe that to be a part of this organization you have to excel academically and posses the qualities and characteristics that the NJHS looks for. I think that I show that qualities and I would be very grateful to be a part of this amazing foundation.

• Answer:

  Really good ideas. (Makes mine sound cheesy) You may want to check grammar, Such as sentence structure, it runs on a little A few other considerations "He has much character, too." doesn't make sense You also may want to change "clean lifestyle" to "healthy lifestyle" because the word clean is very vague Also list a few or your characteristics to be more specific when you say " People have told me that I am a good leader and that I have character" Good Luck!