Help!!!!look down there,what should i write?

I have to write a Financial Aid Appeal letter for College, but I'm SO Lost. Can someone read this over plz?

• I am a student at Henry Ford Community College. I am writing to appeal my Financial Aid for the Spring/Summer semester of 2012 at Henry Ford Community College. I take complete responsibility for the loss of my Financial Aid during the year of 2011. Near the middle of my Winter 2011 semester at Henry Ford Community College, I ran into a major obstacle in my life. I was beginning to wonder what was to become of me after college. I was very confused at the time and started losing interest in my classes as I began to think of the many different choices I had in courses of study. Nothing seemed right to me and whenever I thought of my future it seemed bleak. Nevertheless, I kept trying to progress in school telling myself that after the semester ended I would take a break and figure out exactly what I wanted to become. I was starting to do great again after a couple weeks of pushing myself through. At the beginning of April 2011, I lost my job but was determined not to let it effect me in life as I searched for another one. After applying for many jobs and going over the job qualifications required, I had realized I had no skills or experience in anything, which sent me spiraling into depression. I became concerned with my future and even more confused as to what I wanted to become seeing that I spent so much time in school, but feeling that I had accomplished nothing. I began missing many days of class during the search for myself. I could not bring myself out of bed in time on the days that I actually did attend class. With that, my grades began to falter and many quizzes and homework assignments were left undone. I couldn’t focus because I felt like I had become nothing; going nowhere after all my time spent studying subjects that had yet to become useful to me outside of class. I watched what seemed like everyone around me pick a course of study and stick to it, so sure of what they wanted to become. During the remainder of the semester, I was experiencing withdrawal and anxiety attacks. I started going to class during the last couple weeks fueled by empty determination to complete the semester and take the final, even though I had lost all hope in passing.I returned for the Fall 2012 semester, I was completely determined to stay on the course of study I had chosen which was Criminal Justice. I was fully prepared and had found a great job that would help prepare me for what I was going into. I no longer suffered depression and was back to my old school loving self. I was completing all work required, I was concentrated on all my classes and I was so sure of passing with flying colors. Near the end of that semester I had learned that I had no financial aid and by then it had become too late to write an appeal for the Fall 2012 semester. Still I didn’t let my grades falter; I decided to just pay for the classes out of my pocket. During the last month of the semester, my job closed down and the owner had taken off with all the money leaving me unpaid and unable to pay in full what I owed. At the same time, HFCC had dropped all of my classes due to the fact that they were unpaid for. I left two of my classes as dropped to lessen the charges, and kept attending the remaining two classes in hopes of re-adding them. Soon enough, it was obvious that I would not be able to pay off in full what I still owed, leading me to drop yet another class. However, I re-added the last class and passed it with an A grade. I ended up paying whatever was left of what I had owed and took the Winter 2012 semester off because I missed the appeal deadline. Due to the financial circumstances during the Fall 2012 semester, I was unable to prove to you that I can make satisfactory academic progress, but I am one hundred percent sure that you will not be disappointed in what I can achieve if granted Financial Aid once more. I now have a positive outlook on my future and started a new job in March of 2012. I know now that in order to get something done I must do it myself, meaning if I want a satisfying future, I must academically achieve it with every ounce of power in me. Going through my depression and taking time off to sort it out has opened my eyes to a whole new world. I plan to achieve outstanding marks during the 2012 Spring and Summer semesters at HFCC. I also plan to finish all my required classes by the end of the Fall 2013 semester and achieving an associates degree in Criminal Justice. I want to finish school and get my life on track now more than ever. I am full with a passion to accelerate in all my classes this year and finish with a bright future. I cannot do it without the help of financial aid because I do not make enough to pay it all off on my own. Again, I take full responsibility of my mishaps and the toll it has taken on my academic progress, but I promise to maintain a better GPA if allowed Financial Aid once more. Thank you

• Answer:

  "...I lost my job but was determined not to let it effect me in life as I searched for another one." ***affect, not effect. oh and if it's not too late, maybe instead of talking so much about why you did so poorly during the academic term you could focus on arguing why you deserve the financial aid. good luck!