How do I make my thesis statement more specific?

How do i make this thesis statement about the Cold War better?

• "As the Cold War continued through the 1950s, Americans acquired fears of the post-World War II economy, nuclear proliferation and communistic expansion; The Eisenhower administration addressed fears of the economy successfully while failing to quell those of nuclear developments and expanding communism." do you get what im trying to say? can you make it please help me make this into a good sentense so im trying to say that the eisenhower administration successfully calmed economic fears of post WWII america but failed to quell the fears of nuclear development and communism. you dont have to agree with what im saying but this is what my essay is about

• Answer:

  Several big issues here. First, you have two complete sentences, including the capitalization of the first word in the second sentence, but they are divided by a semi-colon, which is really wrong grammatically. The second issue is that you're trying to say too much in your thesis. The thesis should be short, compact, and clear. You use the sentences leading to the thesis to set the background and extra details that the thesis needs to be understood instead of putting them all into the thesis. The first portion of the thesis should background, not the actual thesis itself. I think a more efficient thesis would be: "The Eisenhower Administration attempted to ease the fears of the nation and succeeded economically, but failed in nuclear developments and the expansion of Communism."