How To Fix My English Grammar?

Please fix my English .?

• Hi, could you fix my sentences I had some conversation but I don't know if these are correct or not. (I'm studying English). Also could you make CAPITAL letters where I have mistakes? 1.(situation - I called T-Mobile) Operator : Hi, good evening. How may I help you? Me : Hi, I got statement today. O : Aha~? Me : When I received a call at 11:00 p.m., they charged it. (Any other good expressions that I can ask to operator?) O : You mean, you received a phone call at 11:00 but the statement showed you have to pay. Is that correct? Me: Yes. Right. O : Your name please? Me : My name? Or the person that this phone's owner? O : Your name please. Me : My name here is **** O : And your last 4 digit social security number? Me : Oh, this phone belongs to my uncle so I don't know his SSN. O : Then, we can't service you. Please ask your uncle and call me again. I'm sorry. me : Okay. By the way, what time is the time that I can make a phone call as (a or not) free? ( or which one is the best way to ask to? -From what time can I make a phone call as free? // What time from can I make a phone call as free? // When is the minimum time that I can call as free?) O : After 9 p.m. Me : All right, and do you think I can get a service when I visit a T-Mobile store?( or Is there any other good way to ask to operator?) O : You should go with your uncle or show an ID. Me : Thanks. 2. (Situation - She was boiling an oil in a pot to cook something) We were talking about something and she was busy because she was cooking other things) So... I decided to help her to reduce her work. Me : I'll do that. I'll put the dumplings in the pot. She : Oh, thanks. Be careful. It's hot. Me : Yap. And after when can I take them out?(I know this is incorrect in grammar but she understood.. So I came up with other sentences that are possible to ask - a. How long time should I put it in the pot? b. How much time do I need to put them in the oil? c. When can I take it out? d. How much time do I have to wait until it is done? e. After how much time do I have wait to take them out? ) She : About 3~5min. Me : Okay. 3.(Situation : When we talk about plug.. I mean electric consents..) a : Can i take the consents off? b : Can i remove the plug? c : Can i take off the plug from the electric outlet? Which one is the natural way to ask among 4sentences?

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  Okay, try these corrections: 1.(situation - I called T-Mobile) Operator : Good evening. How may I help you? ---you wouldn't say both hi and good evening. Me : Hi, I got my statement today. ---don't forget articles! and no "aha," just have him keep talking. Me : When I received a call at 11:00 p.m., they charged it. (Any other good expressions that I can ask to operator?) O : You mean, you received a phone call at 11:00 but the statement showed you have to pay. Is that correct? Me: Yes. Right. O : Your name please? Me : My name? Or the person owns the phone? ---good question! O : Your name please. Me : My name here is **** O : And the last four digits of your social security number? Me : Oh, this phone belongs to my uncle and I don't know his SSN. O : Then we can't service you. Please ask your uncle and call me again. I'm sorry. me : Okay. By the way, at what time do my phone calls become free? OR at what time can I make calls for free? O : After 9 p.m. Me : All right, and do you think I could get service when I visit a T-Mobile store? O : You should go with your uncle or show an ID. Me : Thanks. 2. (Situation - She was boiling oil in a pot to cook something) We were talking about something and she was busy because she was cooking other things) So... I decided to help her to reduce her work. Me : I'll do that. I'll put the dumplings in the pot. She : Oh, thanks. Be careful. It's hot. Me : Yap. And after when can I take them out?(I know this is incorrect in grammar but she understood.. So I came up with other sentences that are possible to ask - A. How long do I wait to take them out? B. How long do they need to cook? C. When do I take them out? ---all of these are good grammar! She : About 3~5min. Me : Okay. 3.(Situation : When we talk about plug.. I mean electric consents..) a : Can i take the consents off? b : Can i remove the plug? c : Can i take off the plug from the electric outlet? Which one is the natural way to ask among 4sentences? Hm. Consents doesn't make sense with "electric;" I think you have the wrong word. "Can I remove the plug from the outlet?" is the best.